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below these urban skies
i lay down and wonder why
why don't i ever try. to live before i die
cause i
could change all these bittersweet existences
i could throw a couples stones
into the world we know
sit back and watch the ripples as they slowly start to flow
cause i
could change all these bittersweet existences
why am i in this room
slowly rotting in this tomb
why is this gloomy world begging me not bloom
cause i
could change all these bittersweet existences
gravities holding on
to every broken pawn
but someday the night will open up to another dawn
and i
will change all these bittersweet existences
i lay down and wonder why
why don't i ever try. to live before i die
cause i
could change all these bittersweet existences
i could throw a couples stones
into the world we know
sit back and watch the ripples as they slowly start to flow
cause i
could change all these bittersweet existences
why am i in this room
slowly rotting in this tomb
why is this gloomy world begging me not bloom
cause i
could change all these bittersweet existences
gravities holding on
to every broken pawn
but someday the night will open up to another dawn
and i
will change all these bittersweet existences
working on turning this into a lyric, could use any advice i can get
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just so you know, i freaking love this. pardon my french :3
but in all seriousness your writing amazes me, the content is golden, your writing style is poetic yet holds a chaos when read, that is incredibly appealing. i love the repeating last line with the resolution so positive... the internal rhyming is executed flawlessly. I do appreciate this particular piece with a passion
but in all seriousness your writing amazes me, the content is golden, your writing style is poetic yet holds a chaos when read, that is incredibly appealing. i love the repeating last line with the resolution so positive... the internal rhyming is executed flawlessly. I do appreciate this particular piece with a passion